I can't really tell you how to envision your memories, I can only tell you what I would have done given the elements/ photos provided. I love the structural elements you've placed below the coaster in the lower right portion of the page, but for me they're not interesting enough to stand on their own and take up 1/4 of the page ... I would have placed the title and journaling over top of them. In their place, I would put the photo of the girl, (which for me is the focal point of the page) I would do my best to make her stand out either through stitching or some other frame or mask. Also... I love those diagonal lines created by the swing. I would find a way to carry those out from edge to edge. I love that golden color seen in the canopy of the swings and mirrored in the color of the girls hair. I would try to use it more in the elements spread throughout the page. It'll serve to unify things a bit.

I love the energy. Great use of the loopdaloop. Nice blending of the top half. Not sure you really need the ride in the bottom half, but I'm a pushover for white space. It looks like you had a ton of fun. Great first page!

I like what you have done, you've captured the excitement and bustle of the fair by blending and overlapping images but yet there is a flow and composition Bravo!!!

Beautiful layering!!

Beautiful .. love the blending!